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  • demongirl1243

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    please don't take this personally! :(
    May 1st, 2012 at 08:03pm
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    okay so little known facts that will make this story from amazingly awesomely delicous is:
    1. slow down your story a bit and break it up
    2. try to do more short paragraphs especially when it comes to speaking parts so its easier to read.
    3. UPDATE PLEASE!!!!
    May 1st, 2012 at 08:03pm
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    comment virginity taken ( i just butt raped your story) XD
    May 1st, 2012 at 08:01pm
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