The Truth About Love. - Comments

  • blonde

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    okay so i guess its obviously still not fucking long enough lol i'm getting super frustrated. but caleb's character is really great and you can tell you really put effort into developing him nicely. there are a few typos though, and some of the writing needs to be edited to flow better.
    February 19th, 2013 at 04:05am
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    ugh comment swap said that wasn't long enough, lol. but although this isn't really something i would read, i do like it. and i like caleb's character.
    February 19th, 2013 at 03:48am
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    this is great
    February 19th, 2013 at 03:47am
  • Mew Aqua

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    This is really good and should be updated more often.
    January 14th, 2013 at 06:18am
  • arye.tyler

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    I noticed a few grammatical errors that were relatively minor, so you might want to go over with a fine-tooth comb to eliminate them or find a Beta.

    Now, that aside, this is a great story, and Caleb is wonderful. You have managed to create a very sensory or descriptive story that is still narrated by a believable blind character. Caleb doesn't seem like the passive "Ooooohhhh, save me! Save me!" blind narrator I find in a lot of these stories, and I appreciate the subtle intellect that he displays. I'm really excited to meet Roman! :)

    I find this story intriguing and well-written, so I've subscribed. I'm excited for updates.
    October 13th, 2012 at 12:58am
  • Lady.V.

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    This is a good story, its not something I would read, not that it isn't good, but I'm just not into these kinds of stories. However, I will come back to read this, I found it interesting. First of all, I would like to praise you on how I seem to be finding no grammar and punctuation mistakes. And how I really enjoy your description. You leave a lot to want to know in the first chapter. Keep on writing :)
    July 17th, 2012 at 08:39am
  • markme21

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    Good start off. You really put people in the perceptive of Caleb. His angry and frustration was powerful. I would love to read more of the story. Where is love takes him, how it helps him understand himself better. you should update soon, I can't wait!
    July 17th, 2012 at 05:10am
  • Kawaii Emotions;

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    The summary paints a completely different picture than the story. I assumed it would be fantasy ( which it could still be). I would suggest livening up the story. At the moment it's pretty boring, I know it's suppose to be a filler, but a reader needs to be interested in the story to want to continue. I would read over this and fix the grammar errors.
    July 17th, 2012 at 05:05am
  • Lukeisanostrich.

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    There are a few typos, and (and this is just MY opinion) some of the writing feels kind of choppy to me. I really like the ideas you've got going on here though. Caleb seems like a strong character, and I'm excited to meet Roman. I'm subscribing. I really like the idea behind this story. I can't wait for more!
    July 17th, 2012 at 03:03am
  • CivilAnimosity

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    Layout is a bit plain, which is expected because it's a default one from Mibba. If you want, I can make you a layout for this story. :3
    Anyways.. the summary was great. It definitely makes one want to read to find out more.
    The first chapter was a great start. I could feel Caleb's frustration. Poor kid, having to move all those times and be teased like that? :( He shouldn't want to blame himself, and hate himself like that D: He sounds like a gorgeous human being... I'm subscribing :3
    July 16th, 2012 at 08:59pm
  • FrenchBeanGal

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    Aww I love it :)))
    July 16th, 2012 at 08:05pm