This Ain't Nothin' - Comments

  • Marilyn Manson.

    Marilyn Manson. (150)

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    (My comment is a product of CS)
    So to start out with the good stuff, I loved the title and layout. The tweeting was my favorite bit from the actual content... but now I expose myself as the pressured commenter. The plot was nothing original, pretty unrealistic, and way too rushed. This was enough for 3 good chapters, or even one really lengthy one.

    Try to slow things down and add some details and filler.
    July 4th, 2012 at 10:22pm
  • Bubblegum Pops

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    I LOVE Niall :)
    He's my favorite. :)
    I agree with blown away;
    Please update soon? :)
    June 17th, 2012 at 06:38pm
  • luke ham ham.

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    This is too cute!
    I really loved it, he is so good with his daughter!
    Please update soon! (:
    June 17th, 2012 at 05:43pm
  • Acee.

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    I'm not exactly a fan of One Direction, but the summary intrigued me regardless of knowing absolutely nothing about the band. So that right there is an accomplishment in itself.

    Based on the first chapter, I can already tell that this story has a lot of potential. You convey the emotions of the characters very well, and it's easy to get an understanding of everything even as somebody who is completely oblivious to the fandom for which this was written.

    Also, I love the last few paragraphs. You can really tell how much Niall cares for Chase. It's actually pretty touching. I actually want to read more of this.
    June 15th, 2012 at 01:58pm
  • Nialls Freckles

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    I really like this. I feel so much for Niall, and my heart hurts. He is so good to his daughter and ugh. Please update soon!
    June 15th, 2012 at 06:27am