Beyond the Rain - Comments

Here from comment swap. :)

This is absolutely adorable. I haven't finished yet but I'm subscribing because as the others have been saying, it's pretty perfect. The character development is well paced and the plot is neither too slow nor too angsty for the content. My only advice would be to change the background of the layout, perhaps. It's rather distracting and honestly I wouldn't have read the story if I couldn't switch to the to Mibba default layout. Other than that, great work. :) I noticed it hasn't been updated in a while, but looking forward to the finish!

@flawless no problem it is simple a compliment of obvious hard work that went into this :)

@ PTV_is_life34
Thank you so much (:

This is the most amazing story I have read on here

This story is actually perfection! I love it so so so so much and i'm not usually a slash reader, but god, something about this story just made me fall in love. Your writing is flawless and your character development is so spot on that it actually hurts, I fell in love with the idea of Billy and Aaron from the first line of your summary! Please please please keep it up xo

This story is actually perfection! I love it so so so so much and i'm not usually a slash reader, but god, something about this story just made me fall in love. Your writing is flawless and your character development is so spot on that it actually hurts, I fell in love with the idea of Billy and Aaron from the first line of your summary! Please please please keep it up xo

I'm sorry, this is really annoying me. I got this story for a comment swap and just because I wrote my thoughts in two different comments, it's saying that they don't count. I do quite like this story though and the way that it was written, especially the style that you wrote the description. Also completely agree with Kovoumakesmetingle about having the gif as a banner (:

Ahh, I accidentally submitted that comment too early! Haha, but I do love the layout, especially the background. I also really love the idea of the story and the way that you've done the description.

Love the layout & gif on this (:

xD I wanted to strangle Billy, dammit! I was like, "You better realize right now." But argh.

I'm getting really into this - you've made me love your characters. I hope you update soon!

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I love this story. I didn't notice any grammar mistakes. This story is pretty good. I hope you update soon. I love the banner. How you used a gif for it. It looks amazing.
The summary is what really drew me into the story. It's not too long and it's not too short.

I like the emotion you're giving off in the first chapter; morose and withdrawn, which seems fitting for his predicament. I don't know if you meant to do this, but in chapter one, you say "str8" a lot. That knocked me off of my sad-feeling horse, as every time I would fixate on it; it made me feel like the character was pretentious. ):

With dramatic ellipses, make sure you're only using three dots (...) instead of an excessive amount.

I like Aaron. He was hopeful, and got crushed, and (admittedly really messed up), I like how he thinks now. (: I hope he finds someone to balance him.

I'll be subscribing to see how this goes! Can't wait for more!

I gotta say, this is pretty dang good. ^w^ I like how you gave us a good look inside Billy's mind and situation thus far in such a clear manner. Also, the description of the setting was wonderfully executed-- just enough detail without shoving it in our faces. I agree with Vicious about the part with Eric, I got it spoiled by reading the comments early and it was still heavily effective.
The one thing that bugs me is your used of "str8" instead of "straight". Maybe this is a common thing for gay relationship stories-- I wouldn't know, this is the first I've read-- but it seems unnecessary and out of Billy's character to me. Just a minor thing.
Overall, I love the style, it's easy and casual without losing the emotion or interest. Keep up the great work.

The layout is beautiful. Simple, subtle, and crucially not distracting from the fic.
No spelling or grammar issues at all.
Personally, I'm a slash fan, so bonus points there.
A kid's attention span is about as long as a gnat's tongue. Brilliant narrative voice here. The wording brings a perfect tone to the narration.
They found Eric's body behind the football stadium, a baseball bat lying beside him. This line was so tragic. The blunt force of it, no pun intended, is skillful writing.

I wish you luck in writing the rest of this :)

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OMG I LOVE IT. The descriptions and the thoughts going though billy's head they are so realistic and I love them. I don't normally read stories about gay relationships ect but this could have changed my mind. Im subscribing to you after this comment :)

I didn't see any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes so well done :D

Carry on writing