Lost in the Shadows - Comments

  • blakeray76

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    please udate Mr. Green
    May 14th, 2014 at 12:00am
  • MelodyRhytm

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    That was amazing, the music fits the setting of the chapter so well. I can't wait for the next update.
    November 28th, 2012 at 06:00am
  • Sapphire Wings

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    :D...hi...ummm. nice update at least i know i dont mind wanting for an update. Your First paragraph was a little awkward i dont know how to explain it. and the A/N for it seemed really unnecessary and can throw the reader off. and i just caught one spelling mistake (Transpiration Jutsu!) Instead of Transportation Jutsu. so yea :D
    July 27th, 2012 at 05:23pm
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    no worries. and thanks for taking my advice and not thinking i was insulting you or anything. :D
    July 24th, 2012 at 05:15pm
  • Sapphire Wings

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    I really like it so far. You're writing is really well done. Umm the only flaw i see is the fact your character seems really perfect with no flaws. no one is that perfect so keep that in mind while you write. or maybe describe more how she learned everything like how you described her training with Guy. Looking forward to see where this goes. :D
    July 24th, 2012 at 03:29am