Lady Grinning Soul. - Comments

I thought that this would have been great if the chapters were more fleshed-out with more details included. I adore the song Lady Grinning Soul, so the title really got me interested. I have to agree with some of the other commenters, though, the flow of the story was a bit off, but still I kept reading until the end.

It has a weak concept, with the short chapters. The plot is not very interesting and I didn't enjoy it that much. I'm sorry for being annoying, but that's my actual thoughts with no sugar coating. I thought the flow wasn't great, because of the format and the characters weren't developed well. I couldn't get Into them because I didn't know them. Make the drabbles longer (change the format), give us more meat! I read it in 10 minutes.

I'm not sure I like this story, the drabbles are well too short that It doesn't interest me as much as the summary did.

I love this story.

Very interesting!

comment swap sent me. I think that you got the way drugs affect someones mind and well being completely accurate. I really liked your writing.

Comment swap sent me here, but I love everything about this story- don't expand on it, the minimalist thing is your writing style. The fics I wrote are from the same era and are focused on sex with bands, so I really liked your story and your unique writing style. The layout is appropriate, and it fits your story. Best fic I've read so far. Keep it up! :)

From comment swap. You should make the story longer and the content flow better. It's tricky to understand. The spelling and grammar is great though! It's also a pretty good idea for a story. Just a tad bit boring. Keep up the good work! It's awesome that you enjoy writing! Your story is great, just tweak the style of wring your using a tad bit. Good job!

From comment swap. The drabble idea takes away from the story. The flow is interrupted and it is hard to get into the story. I think if it wasn't in a drabble format it would be good. The flow would be better and it would make me more interested. But great spelling and grammar, and the idea going through the story was good.

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Some people don't like comment swap and others don't. To me it all depends on whether the story is actually good, and just so you know I think that this is great and has so much potential, I love the plot you've used and can't wait for an update.

Keep writing and good luck

Hey, I'm here from comment swap.
First of all, your theme is hard to read. maybe it's just my browser, but the writing is over the picture and I had to highlight it to read it.
Secondly, I'm guessing the super short chapters are something to do with the drugs? I'm really not sure. But the lack of content really affects your plot flow. The story is going so fast, and the characters haven't developed and we pretty much have no idea what's going on. Your grammar is good though, spelling likewise. I just don't really get this story.

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I have to disagree with the negative review. Not that she should like it, I just disagree personally. I liked the shortness of the chapters. At first I didn't because it seemed like it was just very abrupt and you didn't put any effort into it, but as I kept reading I realized it's almost like her mindset. Fragmented. Sort of confused. Not really spending time on any one thing. I don't know if that's how you intended it, but that's how it came across to me. And the fact that the layout is very plain sort of adds to that whole thing. Not really giving a shit about anything because her life kind of sucks right now. Has no purpose. You know what I mean?

Anyway, those are my thoughts. <3

Was drawn here because of the mention of Pinkfloyd, acid and David Bowie, always the sign of a good piece of writing.

I like this, it's different. It shouldn't be good, because it's short and all that shit, but for some bizarre reason it works. The short chapters and the lack of flow from one bit to the next just kind of goes, because it seems to fit her character (it seems)

It's good so far, but I'm not sure how long you could keep it up for. If a whole story was written as bluntly as this, I might lose interest. It's a novelty, and like I say, I'm not sure how long it would work for. Mix it up abit, throw in one huge descriptive line somewhere and then go back to the short bluntness. Just a suggestion, think it could work.

So yeah, great so far. Be interested to see where you're going with this.

Right on Bacon! This kicks ass, if you can hook people in 100 words or less, you're rocking it. Awesome shitt, keep it coming, oh and I updated Sid, so you should write the next chapter, dude. <3 Love ya!

The person under me, just doesn' understand -.-

Comment Swap brought me here and honestly, I don't like this, at all (sorry).

The chapters are too short, they don't really flow into each other at all, we don't get the chance to know about the characters as there is no proper description. Broken and short sentences can be a good thing but I feel like you've over-used them.

I'm sorry that this is a negative review, but it's my personal opinion on this. You probably tried hard on this but I'm just not feeling it. Sorry.

This is very different to anything I've ever read. It's short and to th point. It gives off the vibe that she doesn't really care much for life anymore, and she just can't be bothered. Only thing I would say, is that for the next chapters, they should be longer. But so far so good.

This is very different to anything I've ever read. It's short and to th point. It gives off the vibe that she doesn't really care much for life anymore, and she just can't be bothered. Only thing I would say, is that for the next chapters, they should be longer. But so far so good.