Passion Marks and Rope Grazes - Comments

Comment swap brought me here. I’m pretty excited to see a Frerard fic that isn’t centered in high school or something. Sure, they’re still pretty dysfunctional but, this is pretty nifty. I kinda wish there was something more unique about it though… it’s sounding a lot like every other Frerard I’ve read.

xD This is great - and I like the picture in the summ. box c: Frankie jumping on Gerard makes my giggle c:<

@ little motorkitty;
Alright, thanks a lot :D

I agree with the pervious comment. My personal opinion, it delves deep into the lustful, intense nature of dom culture but leaves little build up to climactic events. I'm not sure if this is only an "encounter" fan fiction or a story, but I'd like to read more.

First of all, the title isn't spelled correctly. It's 'Graze', if you're reffering to a graze like an injury, then there is no 'i' in it.

I also suggest maybe going through and editing this. For example in the beginning paragraph you wrote 'There wasn’t a single worry in him, he didn’t have a worry in his body,' and it's basically repeating the same thing again. There's also a few spelling and grammar mistakes that I think you should look over, because they really distract from the actual story. A hint for fixing this is to try saying things outloud, especially dialogue, and that makes it easier to see if the story flows well and it'll help you get better as a writer.