Trembling Memory - Comments

Lucky me, I am doing the comment swap :-) Thankfully, the main guy is a babe! Sadly your banner has disappeared :( also I am finding the no space between the paragraphs etc difficult to read, like a big clump. I agree with the other comment about your descriptive writing! it's well done! I have to admit, I like the second chapter the most, i agree with the little something plus. I adore how caring he is of her, it's sweet :-) I really hope you continue wit this, it's got a lot of potential!! - Yasmin x

LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! Fucking great. <3

this is great... cant wait for more :)

Love this :)

Comment Swap sent me here. First of all, I am really loving this story so far. Your writing is very descriptive, which is a big plus, and I find Nevada's attitude toward everything to be really interesting. If I was being forced to find something wrong with this, though, I'd say I found the repetition of "stand" in "So here I stand, standing above the only two..." to be just a bit awkward. Other than that, this story is pretty much perfect. Good luck with the rest of it, and keep being wonderful. ^_^

Ok so I was just doing a comment swap and I was so happy to see that I would have the pleasure of reading a new John Oh story. I love love love him. I like that it starts slow and not at the beginning of them knowing each other, but close enough to where I know I will be able to go on a journey with them. I also like how you portray John. He's not the cocky asshole he usually is in these stories. I'm excited to see where this goes