Tainted Passion - Comments

Wow! I'm from comment swap and holy crap do I like your story. First of all, the begining was cute and all cute and then TOWARDS THE END OF THE CHAPTER I WAS LIKE WHAT NO OMG THIS CAN'T BE HAPPENING. I freaking love Matthew. He's so protective and cute ugh. The twins are adorable, too. I love their little voices! And I think Val is awesome. Seriously, I can't stop reading but I had to remember to write this comment. Please update!
Blake xx

Wow! I'm from comment swap and holy crap do I like your story. First of all, the begining was cute and all cute and then TOWARDS THE END OF THE CHAPTER I WAS LIKE WHAT NO OMG THIS CAN'T BE HAPPENING. I freaking love Matthew. He's so protective and cute ugh. The twins are adorable, too. I love their little voices! And I think Val is awesome. Seriously, I can't stop reading but I had to remember to write this comment. Please update!
Blake xx

Here from Comment Swap.

It saddens me to know that this story will likely never be finished. You've got a really great thing going on here, and it's truly a shame that it'll never get the ending it rightfully deserves. As for suggestions, you're good at creating suspense and action that keeps the reader gripped to what's going on, however it could be much stronger. Better descriptions of emotions and sensory details would do the trick. Other than that, I saw a few grammar and spelling errors, but nothing that really detracted from the reading. So overall, great job. Otherwise, I hope that, somewhere, you're still writing.

Update soon!

I am way too hooked on this story! Please update soon!

Oh God, I love this way more than I probably should... it makes me feel like a psycho, but who cares?! I love this!! Please update soon :3

Oh my God Ali is a psycho! Matt and val had better watch out! Can't wait for more. P,ease update again soon xx

I wonder how far Ali will get with her.. Scheme... Can't wait for more! ^_^

Update soon!

Love this already, it's written wonderfully and certainly something different than the norm. I'm dying to know what happens in the future with Hannah!

This is a very intense story. One that will probably test the boundaries a little bit which is always a great read! I enjoyed the dialogue, it represented each of the characters thoroughly and made you feel what they were feeling. I hope you keep writing!

Its a bit messed up that Hanna is blaming Val....though it kinda makes sense. Who wants to hear that their husband is a creep? Anyway I liked, when are Zacky and Brian gonna come into the story???

I really like this story! I find it interesting though that Hannah thinks its Val's fault and not her husbands. Does she have some kind if disease?

I also really like how he incorporating the band members! I wonder what Zacky and Brian will be...

Comment swap-

First off, the layout was really pretty! My only problem was the font size, it was too small for me to read so I had to highlight it and paste it into Word.
Anyways, this was very well written. I enjoyed it a lot. You write so well with drama and this was just...really good. I think the descriptions were a bit lacking, but I really liked this nonetheless. I didn't even realize it was a fanfiction until I saw "Johnny Seward", lol. But good job!

This was great! I didn't know what to expect but I can't wait to read more:)

{Comment Swap}
So to start off I'd like to say you have a really great layout. I love the pictures at the top are very evocative. The only thing is the text is tiny which makes it really hard to read on the screen.

Well, that certainly wasn't what I was expecting at all. You've got a well written, very dramatic start that will certainly lead on to an interesting story no doubt! I think there could be a little more scenic description but other than that you're all good. Well done! X