August 13th, 2013 at 08:38pm
Everyone elses comments are so indepth that I'm kind of stumped on what to say to even match up to theirs...
But the way that this story is written is so beautiful and captivating that it grabs your attention right from the start. I've read a hell of a lot of stories on mibba and books that have been published, and I am being completely honest when I say that this is one of the best I've read. The description of each character is wonderful and they allow the reader to get a real good picture and idea of who they might be as a person. There's a sense of mystery which keeps the reader hooked.
I'm eagerly awaiting the next update! Keep writing, you're amazing.
Your descriptions are incredibly detailed, but in a simple way. Everything about this was light and easy to read. I didn't find myself bored at all, and instead found myself fascinated by it. I read through all the chapters and loved every sentence in this story.
You have a way of capturing imagery so well that your reader can see everything so easily in their head. I admire that about this story. Well done.