Who Will Save Us? - Comments

Aha, I'm sorry that I offended you. I'm curious as to why you posted a story. Seems you aren't very open to hear what others have to say. I could be mistaken, but I think that's what the comment section is for.

@ blutsteinbattery.
Kindly fuck off. That's just my constructive criticism bitch.

I mean, this isn't a terrible write, but it just lacks the things I think most people are looking for. It's not original by a long shot. The physical structure is a bit rough - maybe look at other's writes or even a book and take a few formatting notes. Actually thinking up a line that's not trite or totally unrealistic would probably help a lot. I'm not positive. That's just my constructive criticism.