@ StacieIerogeance Thank you so much. x3 <3 This just came off of the top of my head one day and I was like "Uh..Okay.. Lets do it!" XD Your comment means a lot. Thank you again. c:
awwwwww i like this and I like the fact that he sang a love song for brian because he came to the store so it makes perfect sense as to why he kept going and playing songs. I can't wait to see what else you have in store.
@ writingismypassion23 Oh my god. Thank you so much. ;w; And yeah, I can drag on and onnnnn with my sentences. I'm trying to become better with that! Your kind words mean so much. Thank you again. <3
I like the idea of this a lot, it has an extremely nice flow to it! I like that you emphasize his voice to a point where I feel like I'm listening to it as well, that's an extremely important aspect of writing to me, and you definitely have it to perfection! I adore the phrase, "I stated, almost proud of myself". You write with a lot of voice which I like because it makes your characters relatable. After they introduced themselves, in the paragraph under where Matt says his name, when the sentence starts "Well built, at least six feet tall...." and then it goes on and on. I love everything you're saying, but you could break that sentence into two or three separate ones. That's the only run-on I could spot, so congratulations ^_^ I loved reading this and I hope you continue to write forever because you're truly wonderful at it!
God Bless,
xoxo
Olivia
August 15th, 2013 at 10:13pm
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Thank you so much. x3 <3 This just came off of the top of my head one day and I was like "Uh..Okay.. Lets do it!" XD Your comment means a lot. Thank you again. c: