Saranghaeyo, Kris - Comments

Thank you so much! I will update as soon as possible=).

I loved it I can't wait to read more. Sorry I didn't read it sooner! KMU

Thank you very much. I will look it over and see what I can do to make it better. And...the band is EXO. They are from SM, and they are normally divided into Exo-M and Exo-K, but brought together at their comebacks. Thank you for your help.

So, I think you have a good story going on here, and it has tons of potential. You've written the characters well so far, and their interactions are great. I don't know what this band is, I'm assuming it's K-Pop, but that didn't matter because the characters stood on their own without needing to know anything about them.

I do think you should add more details in the chapters though. If you added more emotions into the characters and more details into their surroundings, your readers would be able to relate a bit easier to the story, and it would almost seem more personal.

It would also be good if you broke up the text. What you have right now is just a wall of text, which makes it difficult to concentrate on and read. Basically, if you push enter twice between paragraphs instead of once, it would make it a lot easier to read and it would look a lot cleaner, for lack of a better word.

But yes, this story has a ton of potential, and good luck with writing the rest of it!