The Shortcut - Comments

There was a spelling mistake in the beginning I caught where thought should have been though.

You might wanna change this line "His bit hardened, and shook his head violently," to maybe "He bit down harder, and shook his head violently."

Also you might wanna change the to in " I picked it up and threw it to him" to at.

Over all it was a very awesome oneshot. And I loved the twist at the end where it was Brian's mate she was suppose to be instead of Matt's. very awesome job and I loved it!

Oh I really loved this! I love how you made his pursuit of her brutal and bloody. There was suspense too which I enjoyed a lot. I bet Syn would be a hot wolf. Of course Syn would be a hot anything. Great job on this hun. I really liked your writing style and story idea.

That was great! I loved it because it was different. I don't usually like werewolf stories but this was really intriguing. Good luck with the competition.

Ah, I really loved this!!!