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  • ChemicallyAlive

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    @ catharsis.
    Okay... Thanks? I, uhm, didn't really expect such constructive criticism.. But thank you. I'll go back through and check it. Have a nice day.
    January 21st, 2014 at 12:51am
  • catharsis.

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    You've portrayed their relationship very well; it's nice that they're in an established relationship but you can still make it interesting.

    You use ellipses a lot, and I would suggest reading through and determine if those are necessary all the time, because they disrupt the flow when used excessively.
    January 20th, 2014 at 08:06pm
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    You've portrayed their relationship very well; it's nice that they're in an established relationship but you can still make it interesting.

    You use ellipses a lot, and I would suggest reading through and determine if those are necessary all the time, because they disrupt the flow when used excessively.
    January 20th, 2014 at 08:06pm
  • catharsis.

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    You've portrayed their relationship very well; it's nice that they're in an established relationship but you can still make it interesting.

    You use ellipses a lot, and I would suggest reading through and determine if those are necessary all the time, because they disrupt the flow when used excessively.
    January 20th, 2014 at 08:06pm
  • ChemicallyAlive

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    @ JennaMathews143
    Aww thank you! I love you now lol Mr. Green
    November 27th, 2013 at 06:39am
  • JennaMathews143

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    I love this! Write more, write more! <3 I'm definitely recommending this to my readers.
    November 27th, 2013 at 06:37am