Lily - Comments

Gr8!

I like how the story depicts the love for someone “unattainable” because it doesn’t get shown a lot in stories. In the end, it was great that the girl decided she couldn’t live that way anymore, but I wish that the story would have ended with the line “Not anymore.” It would feel a bit more definite to me that she was going to go on living a new way. It would also leave the story open to the reader; the reader would be able to see that she was going to live happier or sader based on their own thoughts. I like the way that you used italics for the questions and bold print for the answers because it made it seem as though the girl’s mind was creating a definite answer.

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I absolutely, utterly adored this! I love how the main character is thinking "Should I break up with him or not?" I love how her questions are in italics and her answers are in bold. It just gives the story that emotional feel to her debate inside her head.

I feel bad that she was cheated on, but I'm glad she has the strength to end it. I like how she was scared at first, doubtful even, but built her confidence back up.

I am defiantly reccing this! Please keep on writing!

This was GRAND!!!