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  • Lily Barnes

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    Wow, this was so intriguing. You did so much with just a hundred words per chapter. It made the story read surprisingly quickly, and gave me all the feels. Pete was such a jerkface in this: I hope it doesn't make me hate him in any future FOB stories I read! Good job!
    October 22nd, 2017 at 10:57pm
  • Brittt

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    wow, this was soooo good. I felt so bad for her. Pete, you asshole.
    November 17th, 2016 at 10:52pm
  • santi santi

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    Ugh, I'm so sad!!
    February 23rd, 2015 at 09:35am
  • TrustMyRage

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    I think my heart just broke ...
    February 22nd, 2015 at 05:16am
  • gailm2343

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    PETER NO
    February 22nd, 2015 at 04:13am
  • santi santi

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    Gah my heart is breaking Sad
    February 22nd, 2015 at 04:03am
  • Just Smile

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    I'm absolutely in love with this story! I hope you update soon. (:
    February 16th, 2015 at 02:44am
  • gailm2343

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    Pete no. I will shove you down a well.
    2 Guns pete is gonna get hurt
    February 14th, 2015 at 12:52am
  • Bangarang!

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    NOOOOO!! gosh! this is terrible, I feel so sorry for her... he is a dick! Grr
    February 5th, 2015 at 01:06pm
  • Bangarang!

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    NOOOOO!! gosh! this is terrible, I feel so sorry for her... he is a dick! Grr
    February 5th, 2015 at 01:06pm
  • santi santi

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    Ugh I hate him
    February 4th, 2015 at 02:24am
  • Bangarang!

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    OH NO HE DIDN'T! WHAT THE HELL! Oh I feel so sorry for the main girl, seriously that is just harsh! Pete you're being a dick! Stop that... I want her to hit him or yell at him or do something about his ways. One minute he loves her the next he is breaking her heart! NO!!! It's just not fair :'(
    February 3rd, 2015 at 11:33am
  • tabula rasa.

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    This is so great! I love the short chapters-- you've managed to pack in so much emotion and details into each one. I definitely cannot wait to read more!
    February 3rd, 2015 at 12:01am
  • santi santi

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    Sad
    February 2nd, 2015 at 11:48pm
  • santi santi

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    Ugh I'm so conflicted, she should leave him because he's such a dick but then he's like the sweetest ever
    February 2nd, 2015 at 08:29am
  • folie a deux

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    oh wow, I'm so hooked on this already <333
    January 31st, 2015 at 06:48pm
  • Bangarang!

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    I gotta say you started this so damn well… Like I was honestly sucked in and instantly felt for the main girl. I know this one is going to be heartbreaking… Cry
    “I thought you didn’t care about the constellations.”

    “You know I’m a sucker for love stories Pete.”
    THIS QUOTE! I love this quote because it is relatable. It would be something I would say.

    And bam chapter three… you just had to hurt my heart didn’t you and you only used 100 words to do so. Honestly. Not fair! I kinda hope that she finds someone that loves her and doesn’t play mind games with her Cry

    OHHH the emotions and the feels and the… NO!!! HIT HIM! Tell him something! Tell him it hurts! but still fantastic. Honestly you are a great writer and you convey emotions so well… YES
    Update soon :)
    January 30th, 2015 at 02:33pm
  • santi santi

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    My heart hurts, each chapter has my heart breaking
    January 30th, 2015 at 10:34am
  • nearly witches.

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    The new album needs more fanfiction already, so I'm really glad to see this popping up!

    Can I just say that I've pretty much eternally been in love with Pete Wentz and your first chapter kind of made me love him even more? I mean, I love the idea of him playing these mind games. I have no idea why, but it really suits him. I can definitely imagine him doing this and the narrator is absolutely correct, he's utterly irresistible. This all seems like it's setting up to die though. The relationship, I mean, not your story. There is just something about the way he's acting and the way that she can see it that just makes me slightly worried for the welfare of both parties.

    You're really doing such a wonderful job of portraying the two and the way that the relationship is structured in such a tiny amount of words. I'm absolutely envious and can't wait to see where you take this next!
    January 29th, 2015 at 11:11pm
  • santi santi

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    Oh man the last part kinda broke my heart Sad
    January 29th, 2015 at 02:42am