I really, really love the plot to this story. You have some super great ideas spinning in that head of yours. My only problem is the way it keeps bouncing back and forth between present tense, and past tense... (Though I'm sure I unintentionally do that too.) Unless it's meant to be that way, as this is kind of a peculiar story? Either way. Fantastic, and I'm also not sure why this story isn't LOADED with comments, considering the 22- soon to be 23- recommendations.
July 24th, 2016 at 06:41pm