Oh my shizz! Run, chicka! How noble and brave of you to let the hood-thing target you instead of both you and Hyun. Ugh! But if he lets her take all the spotlight of the monster without trying to help, I give up on him.
Okay, firstly, let me start off. The layout is beautiful. It reminds me of Lord of the Rings, especially with that banner! The summary is intriguing. Made me think of the movie Hook and that one person who lost their marbles.
Chapter 1
I really like Shatter's name. Quite unique, if I do say so. I'm not big on the whole logical front (Bleh!) But I am curious as to where this will lead
Chapter 2
OMG! Stages of death just made me think of Legend of Zelda: Majora's Mask (yes, I can find a Link to anything) and ooooooooooo someone spoke. Who is it?! I need to know! But I think the length is good =)
Chapter 3
Never have she moved so fast ^had
A slight paused followed ^had
dodged two more splashed before ^splashes
Holy hell! He had freaking subtitles. I'm crying. That's just too perfect. But I imagine him to be a handsome freaking guy, with a dangerous face. I don't know why. And I love how childish Shatter is acting xD
Chapter 4 I don't know if I trust him, but I feel like she is going above and beyond. and OMG something is coming. They better work together and freaking run!
Ugh! But now I have to go get my sister from the bus and clean the kitchen. So I'll read the next chapter later. I'm so anxious!
this is a super interesting take. i love shatter bc she's so relatable especially when you see her mood swings in chap two. also *bows* my cocaine candied reference popped up that fit so well. i love how you describe the place around her as well. the layout was one way to imagine it, but reading it- i can see the surrounding area w/ my eyes closed. well done
I was considering writing an Into the Badlands fanfiction and my main character was going to be Shatter...glad I'm not the only one who considers that an awesome name!