What He Left Behind - Comments

@ jamila1990
Okay great, I'm currently considering whether or not to do a sequel. If I don't then I'll add in an epilogue but if I do, I probably won't start it until late June when exams finish.

@ Ella Joanne
lol yes. It can be like a 1 or even 5 years later thing or something, just so I know how things worked out

@ jamila1990
Oooh, that's a good idea. So perhaps an epilogue is needed or something like that?

That's it? nothing about him going to rehab or anything because it's obvious he'd do anything for her. Just some unanswered questions about the addiction part for both Charlie and the brother, and will the parents make a trip to LA to visit the baby?

aww he came all that way to kiss her and take her out

and congrats on your rl romance too :)

I love this so much! Can't wait to see what happens!

Well, since the next chapter is your favorite, you might as well post 2 chapters in 1 day. :)

@ jamila1990
Am I that predictable? Ah that's a good point actually. Thanks for pointing that out; will fix that now! Thank you so much, I'm so pleased you like this.

I did sorta think she had his child when I read she contacted her. lol How did they see the tattoos on her arms if she had on black long sleeves? Besides that it's getting really good and I can't find out what happens next.

I enjoy reading this. It makes me feel pissed one second, and hope everything will be happy and good. Then, I'm sad about random messed up stuff going on in their lives. Hopefully, something good happens between Noelle and Charlie soon.

I love this story so much! For me it's very relatable and i think that's why I love it as much as I do. I was crushed when I saw that you had planned on changing the characters because you no longer wanted to write a fan fic. Normally when people say that they never rework the story and it leaves you thinking about the what ifs. Keep writing it's amazing

@ PoeticMess.
Hello you! I've posted so many versions of this story now I can barely keep up so it's no wonder you can't. Believe it or not, it wasn't actually intentional. I spent forever thinking up a name because I couldn't think of anything that suited the character but then someone suggested Charlie and it wasn't until a couple of weeks later that I clicked and realised the coincidence!

Okay, fair point. I find scenes like that tricky because I suck at writing more action-based scenes (not just drama sort of action but all kind of action if that makes sense). I'm guilty of playing it a bit safe and sticking to writing feelings, thoughts and speech. But I will definitely take that into consideration and should really push myself with the things I struggle with instead of avoiding them.

Thank you so much. Your feedback always means so much to me. Hope I don't disappoint.

@ RFarley1991
Thank you so much! I hope I don't disappoint.

I was so surprised to see this pop up on MyMibba page! And even more surprised to see "Ronnie" replaced with "Charlie"! I remember you telling me (or talking about) taking him out of it, but I guess I never got the updates!? By the way, was using his dog's name intentional? Because it's hilarious.

The first chapter is pieced together a bit, which is fine. The only reason I brought it up it because I think it's smart to show us that her mother is sick right off the bat. But I think there needs to be more there. Instead of telling us she's the one who has to look after her, show us. Have her make dinner, help her to the bathroom, etc. I think if you elongate that part of the chapter, you can end it after that scene and then start the next chapter in the morning. That way it doesn't jump around too much. I think it'll flow better and show us more about Noelle.

I'm really excited for this! :)

Can't wait to see what you have changed in this rewrite. I really like this story so I'm glad you're still writing it. Sorry for the loss of your mom