Pretty Okay keep writing :)
September 20th, 2008 at 02:31pm
Very interesting and I can see potential.
Oh, could you split it into paragraphs [double ones too] at all please? Like such:
“There are no ghosts, Miss Enid.” The lady said.
She’d grown used to calling Enid ‘Miss’, as she was in actual fact working for the thirteen-year-old girl, although her parents were dead now.
It just makes it easier to read. Other than that I would love to see more. :mrgreen: