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I agree that the introduction was a bit off. but it was a great article, and was interesting

April 11th, 2009 at 08:51am
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You didn't introduce who the article was about. You just began with saying "she". That is very bad. Start with who "she" refers to and you won't have confused readers.

April 6th, 2009 at 12:44pm

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