Mibba - Comments

Oh also for advice,
Update your story frequently,
People get bored and move on when you don't...

Before

So this is me. my name is Maree, and in roughly one month i will be 16. I have chocolate brown hair and steel blue eyes my skin is ivory white and i must say im a city slicker.
my life is pritty good i must say i have a boyfriend who i love dearly and probally some of the best friends in the world. On my own i am a bit of an outcast but put me with these guys and were almost invinsable.

after

So this is me. My name is Maree, and in roughly one month I will be 16. I have chocolate brown hair and steel blue eyes, my skin is an ivory white color and I must say, I’m a city slicker. I admit my life is pretty good at this moment, I have a boyfriend who I love dearly and probably some of the best friends in the world. Though when I’m on my own, I am a bit of an outcast but put me with the guys and we’re almost invincible.

Now read the two and see the big difference?

When you reread your chapters, have you noticed the grammar mistakes and the shortness... I'm not one with the longest chapters in the world, but you can't have the shortest chapters neither. Keep the story interesting, a way you can seperate your paragraphs is by starting with the person talking. For an example check out any of my stories.

I know it's hard to fit in, but you got to be willing to take advice.
Now some people can give good critism, and others can be just plain mean.
But like they said in nicer terms, Mibba put a spell check button,
now I've never used it but I'm sure it'll work for you...

If not then go get microsoft word, or even find a person who will look over your story in the forums. As for the whole begining statement about how we suck, I know you just needed to vent...
But what you gotta remember about Mibbians,
Some of them to tend to want drama or don't like the disrespect which is VERY understandable, just right now I'm in a more calm mood...
Or else to be honest I'd be crawling up your butthole too, lol...

I get what you're saying,
Some people are too sensitive though,
It's your opinion I'll respect that...

I have two stories that are popular (i guess),
I didn't get almost 200 readers within the first day,
All you can do is keep writing the story,
Make sure to have a good description (the mini one)
That way when people read the title they can look at the description (before even opening it) and see whether they want to read it or not....

Most people read stories that are in first person, or have a good begining paragraph...
Spelling is also important, and being able to correctly space your paragraphs to make it easier for them to read...
Just reread your story and see where you (as a reader not writer) would have a problem with it,
Is the begining boring? Etc...
I'll read your story to help,
knowing I've been in this position too,
Where it just doesn't make sense...
K?

But beware, I'm deathly honest...
Don't ask what you can't handle k?

Ya know, within two week's most people on here arn't mibba famous for writing. You have to give it time, and maybe if you're nice to people instead of telling them they suck, you'll make friends and gain some readers.

You can't tell us we suck and then expect us to read your story. :|

Well. Isn't that a mean first line.
Yes, you can get banned for it.

I checked it out, use spell check please.

Before you start insulting people, I suggest you go write a mind blowing story before you do. (:

Firstly, you don't bitch at people and expect them to magically love you and adore your writing. I've been a memeber for over a year, and when I get four or five comments per chapter I am extatic.
If you think that it's unfair people don't read your story, find a better way to invite them over: put links in your signature, read others' stories, do your best. first stories almost always suck and if you have the patience to stick around for a while you will find your writing improves greatly.

by sticking around I mean reading other stories, participating in some way to what this site is about (I'll leave that one to your fair guess).

LOL. Niceeeee.

Wow. You made me feel so warm and fuzzy on the inside that I have to go read your story!

Get a grip. Insulting us isn't a great incentive for us to read your stories.
It takes a lot of time to become a well known author, and until then, I recommend that you stop insulting us, and use spell check.

Same thing all of them said \/ \/ \/

Darlin', you're seriously delusional if you think you can waltz onto Mibba and instantly be a popular author. Even moreso if you think telling us we suck will make us read your story.

If you want feedback on your story you can play the Story/review game in the off-topic forums. Or search around for a beta in the writing forum.

There's plenty of things you can do to get a decent review aside from insult people... Mibba's v. against that, you could get banned easily.

Lol.
Fail.
Mibba has 68908 members... You cant expect to have a well known story in 2 weeks.

Yes, because by telling us we suck, that will really make us want to take the time out of our lives to read and comment your story. Totally.

I just checked out your story, and I didn't even try to pass the 3rd line. There's a spell check option.... use it.

And people here don't suck, they just won't read what does not appeal to them.

She's right about that.
You can get banned for it.

There is a reason people aren't reading it, so try and fix it.

You people at Mibba suck

Um, you can get banned for that, fyi.
I think you should get rid of it, unless you're totally serious.
And if you are, you should click that lovely 'x' on the top right hand corner. ^_^