Suggestions - Comments

V I agree with this, and I also made some quick suggestions on the story comments page. Don't panic, though, because there's nothing essentially wrong with your characters or plot- all the 'wrong' things are just technical and should be easy enough to fix. :]

Also, feel free to hit me up if you need a beta reader in future.

I looked at your story and I'm not trying to be rude but, it needs a lot of fixing or else it's going to get reported. You need to use proper grammar and spelling. And posting a chapter of character descriptions is against the rules; that's what the character sections for.

Your writing has a lot of potential, I think you just need a beta reader to help you out with the grammar and spelling issues.

Just gimme five.

What's the name of the story? I'll take a peak and see if I have suggestions.