You need to use standard grammar in your journals. Your main problem is with your use of commas. Commas should come straight after the word (no space) and then have a space before the next word. For example: 'I want to become a better poet or rapper, I sing too, haha.'
Also, bashing people is against the rules on Mibba (as is using profanity in journal comments).
Also, bashing people is against the rules on Mibba (as is using profanity in journal comments).