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  • Kyra

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    Alright, I fixed it on my copy. Thanks. =)
    August 27th, 2007 at 08:04am
  • OldPeopleLikeFritos

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    IT's good.
    One thing though-
    You have to make paragragh 2 and 3 connect more.
    As in, have more of a connector sentence at the end of Para. 2. and the beginning of Para. 3.
    August 27th, 2007 at 07:59am
  • Bygeera

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    i think i read that book.
    August 27th, 2007 at 07:56am
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