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  • mibbba

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    What exactly is the paper suppose to be about? I mean you say "Indigenous Religion Comparison:" But if you're just suppose to be discussing/ comparing indigenous religions to 'organized' religions then you shouldnt be injecting your views on which one you like 'better'. But if it suppose to be about which one you identify with more then its great, and I agree with removing 'hodgepodge', but again, depends on how formal its suppose to be...
    October 9th, 2007 at 03:54am
  • Fentoozler

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    Take out "more" infront of modern. I don't know if this is supposed to be a formal essay, but I wouldn't use contractions. Avoid slang like "hodgepodge"

    But other than that, well done and well written =)
    October 9th, 2007 at 02:18am
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