Am I Losing You Guys? - Comments

@ ImaginationOverload.
Yes, hopefully it does!! That's what will draw readers into the story. Believe me, I learned that in the past.

and oh thank you!!!! makes me bummed that football season is over though

@ ugly lights
Thank you so much for the feedback. I've added a short summary and a longer one, so we'll see if that works. Also - I LOVE your signature ;)

Checking the story out, I think what may help you is if you add some sort of summary in to it. That will draw more readers into it.