I am ready to share this with the world. [be brutal]

okay, so as you may know i am a songwriter and i have never posted a song on a website or anything so I've decided to share this one that i wrote the other day.
i want constructive criticism
not "you suck"
get it?
got it?
good.
oh yeah, music is coming along shortly but to give you an idea, just think techno-hardcore :)
so here it is:::

[no title]

Whoa-oh!
Your lips, they crash into mine.
I’ve dreamt about this only one million times before.
But now this is real, there are no words to explain how I feel!
I’ve loved you for the longest time and I want everything to come out just right.

LET’S GO!
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
I love you is all I ever wanted to say.
Oh my god that’s so cliché!
Hey! Hey!
You better get it straight!
You’re the only one for me [the only one for me]
So don’t let me go tonight and everything should be alright.

The clock strikes twelve
And you’re touching my hips while I’m kissing your lips
I know you’re scared, well I am too.
All I ever wanted was to be here with you!
I hope it’s true!
All the things you said.
Because now we’re both lying naked in my bed.

Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
I love you is all I ever wanted to say.
Oh my god that’s so cliché!
Hey! Hey!
You better get it straight!
You’re the only one for me [the only one for me]
So don’t let me go tonight and everything should be alright.

You’re touching on me
While the heat is rushing to my cheeks
And I’m afraid!
That you won’t love me the way I love you by the time this night is through!

Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
I love you is all I ever wanted to say.
Oh my god that’s so cliché!
Hey! Hey!
You better get it straight!
You’re the only one for me [the only one for me]
So don’t let me go tonight and everything should be alright

I knew you were lying because you left me crying
And if you loved me like you said
You wouldn’t have left the house before I got out of bed.

Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
I gave myself to you.
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
But by the time we were through
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
Whoa-oh-oh-oh
My love for you only grew.
Whoa-oh-oh-oh

hope you liked it...

:DD

XoXoSTAR