Wow, that's so creative! I really liked it (especially because it's my kind of topic). The way you listed the names of known fallen superheroes - i.e. Superman, Ironman - was cool and informative, and added intrigue. It actually really drew me in, the way that you laid it out (especially with the picture to set the mood), and that doesn't happen often. The only thing I could possibly comment upon is that 'masks' could be with a capital letter, you know? To add impact? And just that maybe shorter sentences could be used in only a couple places. Like, "Superman - Missing in Action. Kidnapped and tortured by Lex Luthor and Zod, now presumed to be a broken shell of a man.". Kind of military/organized band of rebels type thing. (If that makes any sense at all)
Otherwise, amazing. Genuinely.
I See You
Otherwise, amazing. Genuinely.
I See You
October 12th, 2011 at 08:55pm