- Blackjack.:
- If anyone would mind helping me with Les Cygnes, I would be much obliged. I love the story (it's my favourite fairytale) and so the fact that something in my execution of it seems to fall a little flat is pretty upsetting.
I posted a comment for you. =)
- Technicolour Phase;:
- Omg this is amazing. the stories I can't seem to update right now, even though I really want to, are Innocence and Closure. ;-;
For
Innocence, I think you should go into what it is that he and his "father" are trying to do. You have it set and ready, now you just need to unconfuse us a little bit. Not too much though. That should lead you into the plot itself and get you set for the rest of the story.
For
Closure, I think you should start the next chapter with them getting to the apartment. I think she should thnk she sees him again, or she should have a nightmare. You could take this to the dramatic "he raped me and got me pregnant" or you could have him come back. Or if you want to get it over with, you could have them get a wonderful phone call of "we think we caught him, can you identify him please" and then all is well because he's behind bars getting a broom shoved up his butt because that's what happens to rapists in prison. Do any of these help you? If not, I can come up with more. =)
- STEVE.:
- i'm trying desperatly and pouring my heart and soul into Elle Me Dit, and it's only chapter one. argh.
What are you struggling with? I'm not sure how to help because you don't have anything posted. Maybe PM me what you have? I can read through it and give you some ideas on where to go and how to boost it up a bit.
- Haven.:
- I got some serious issues with Ashes to Ashes and Night Angel.
Blackjack is kind enough to say below that she'll help you so feel free to PM her, respond here, etc.