no problem. :)
for your story, a run-on sentence would be the use of commas in every sentence, and it just keeps going on and on. you're supposed to cut the sentence in half and put a period when one idea is complete. Here's an example from your story, from the first chapter; "Football had always been the one main thing in my life, I had never really been interested in boys, a few male footballers from when I was 15 to 18 had taken a big part in my life, my first love also broke my heart, so I gave up on the love part after that."
Here's how it's supposed to be; "Football had always been the one main thing in my life. I had never really been interested in boys, but there were a few male footballers from when I was 15 to 18, who had taken a big part of my life. My first love also broke my heart, so I gave up on the love part after that."
Here's the definition of run-on, according to dictionary.com. "having a thought that carries over to the next line, without a syntactical break."
Hopefully this helps. :)
:) thanks for the story comment! And I'll do my best to get the next chapter out as soon as possible, but for reals, soccer and cross country take up my whole life now. it's ridiculous. but anywayyy, if you have anything you want to happen/ideas, that'd be cool beans :) I mean I have a general idea, but ya...little ideas are fab.
PHSHH, THATS WHAT ALL THE PRETTY ONES SAY ;)
And oh my damn YES someone who actually understands that C.Ron is overpaid, whiny, generally useless if the ref knows how to ref and full of different diving tactics.
Thanks so much again for the comment on Us Against The World. I am glad you are hooked. If you are interested in another vampire story, Taste and I have Emotions Run Wild, its a Jasper story and the girl in it can't feel emotions. You may want to read it because we are going to start combining the two co-writes. Two different stories with the same sequel because they are connected. Only if you are interested of course. Thanks again for the comment.