Mymockingbird / Comments

of course.
it's a beautifully written story :)

Ehehe. Thanks for the comment and for the advice on the layout. :) Personally I prefer the newer one too, but I was just unsure of the newer one since it might be too ominous... :\ Anyhoo~ thanks again. :)

No problem! I was glad I could help! =)

Alright, well I feel like the beginning chapters were really strong and really good. I think that they started to go downhill a little with the arrival of Dahlia and their escape from Lexington. The next few chapters after their escape were kind of confusing and weren't very cohesive to the rest of the story. I think that if you found a different way of introducing Dahlia to the story and a different way for them to escape, you could make it much stronger. My suggestion would be to have Dahlia brought in as another patient and maybe have another flashback, showing how Dahlia knew Meg from the past and how her presence is relevant to the story as a whole. And then to move the story away from Lexington, Meg could escape, taking Dan as her prisoner, and Dahlia could follow Meg into the forest where the rest of the story would take place. But these are just suggestions, so you can take them or leave them. I hope I helped! =)

No problem! It really is a great story. I have a few suggestions though, if you don't mind hearing them?

"Heeere's Danny!" is also one.

Thank you for the comment, sweetheart. I'll continue with ScrimShaw and Rexi just for you <3

Thanks for the feedback! :D

really?
it's amazing honestly.
very well written

Dear Mymockingbird,
Awwwww I love me too. :) Hahahaha i'm kidding!
Anyway, no worries I'm glad I was able to help you. :)
Cough... Touch? Actually, I will admit this: I wrote Ch.4.... but my computer shut down before i could save it. D:
So... I am still in the process of mourning.
(don't worry, chap should be up soon!) X)

Well, I think that you are doing a magnificent job with it. =]

lol. They actually are really fun. Because if the people are strong enough, they can carry you in it! Ha ha. It was so much fun.

But, you're welcome. =] It is definitely an interesting story.

Oh yay! I was sooo worried I came off as a snob. I'll go and read it (:
Don't even trip. This whole website's about becoming better as writers :)

Aw, no problem. The story is really, really good.

So good in fact, I forgot what I was going to say(:

thank you for the comment!
really! ngaaww (>A<)
i'm happy you like it
it's nice to get feedback from
the readers! it made my day...
/blushes
:)

Thanks for the story comments!
:]

I honestly have no idea how I came up with the carwash thing. In chapter 33 of Lasting Impression, I mentioned that Jack had done that with an ex-girlfriend, and I realized that I shouldn't let that idea go to waste, so I put it into Jamais Vu.

I figure that by recycling, I'm doing my part in saving the environment.
;)

Oh wow. Thank you. I try:P
I will soon. Im a bit busy updating and things:)
I'll put it on my list.

lol.
Since you're so adamant, I'll get on writing an update now.
;)

Thanks for the comment!

Sure!
I'll check it out right now.