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  • Fly Birdy Fly

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    Well, I'm just saying that it's easy for anybody to change some things around and call it their own. Lookin' out for a fellow Mibbian :)

    But good luck with publishing it and all.
    July 24th, 2009 at 05:33am
  • Lilitu_Lilith

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    *grasps your hand and shakes* nice to meet ya ^ ^
    July 24th, 2009 at 04:31am
  • imagine27

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    Thank you :)
    July 24th, 2009 at 04:26am
  • Lilitu_Lilith

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    kk ill be sure to check it out im kiri btw
    July 24th, 2009 at 04:17am
  • imagine27

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    Thank you so much! If you have time, please check out my story "The Music to His Lyrics", and leave a comment sharing your thoughts. I'll be sure to check out your poems as soon as I can :)
    July 24th, 2009 at 04:12am
  • imagine27

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    I really liked the story Origin of the Blue Princess. Very imaginative :) Please check out my own story if you have a chance.
    July 24th, 2009 at 03:54am
  • JoeeElise;;

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    lol i guess not.
    July 19th, 2009 at 03:25am
  • JoeeElise;;

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    Im online right now. lol
    =]
    July 17th, 2009 at 07:27am
  • BritBrit

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    I'm glad to be of help. I will read chapters 2 and 3 and see if i can help with anything else.
    July 17th, 2009 at 02:24am
  • JoeeElise;;

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    Seri! =]
    July 16th, 2009 at 11:40pm
  • BLUESTARSPARK

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    hey girl long time no chat!
    July 14th, 2009 at 03:04am
  • YoungChefJames

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    Hey there thanks for the warm welcome. I've got some poems up with some stories coming soon. So if you wouldn't mind checking out my stuff i'd really appreciate it.
    July 13th, 2009 at 09:15pm
  • manslayer101

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    do you like my poems?
    July 13th, 2009 at 03:21am
  • Tokensplash

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    No problem, and thanks!
    July 13th, 2009 at 01:20am
  • Music_YuGiOh_Freak

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    It's Ok
    July 12th, 2009 at 09:41pm
  • I'mlost287

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    :D :D :D
    July 12th, 2009 at 06:11pm
  • I'mlost287

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    thats such a nice thing to say! thanks
    July 12th, 2009 at 03:22am
  • visualprince

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    Hey I was wondering if you could check out my story: Prestigious Bloodlust and Betayal
    I'll check out any of yours in return :)
    July 11th, 2009 at 08:34am
  • Tokensplash

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    Sorry I've been gone for so long. Hmm...now about your story. It has an interesting idea, but it's confusing and kinda vague. You can also maybe try adjusting Alsia's character slightly so that she isn't as stuck up and less childish, and maybe more reserved. How old is she supposed to be anyway? Now about the writing, I saw a fair amount of typos and grammatical errors; also sentences that seemed to lead nowhere. Maybe you could also try describing feelings and settings and textures, sounds and scents more, it makes a story seem more real if you do that. Other than those few things, I thought it was good. I hope that was helpful!

    Do you think you could do me a favour and read my fanfiction and give me some helpful feedback?
    July 9th, 2009 at 10:58pm
  • Toxic Kitten

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    YELLOW! How are you today?
    July 9th, 2009 at 09:14pm
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