Why, I'm just admiring some roadside cattle....
Lol not really.
But wouldn't that be great?
Oh! our neighbor got a donkey!
and he is so cute!
he hangs with the llamas!
and rolls in the dirt.
:D
Haha well that may be true... but definitely keep writing. You can always get better. And ask those people what the heck they're talking about so you can fix it. I like that you told me what it was that was wrong, not just nonsense.
Thanks for the suggestions. It was written for a cliche challenge so I was trying to make it in Fork, and they met in Chemistry, like Bella and Edward met in Biology... it was an attempt to be sarcastic/funny.
Thanks for the spelling suggestion. I'll try that! It's a good idea.
i can't wait to see >w<