I really liked it was well written,it was intense, I had a smile on my face the whole time I was reading it...you are doing a great job:D
And it is okay if you didn't get it all in this chapter :D
I think Patrick should take her home for 88 minutes in heaven lol make it out to the way you want it like it could be kissing or if you want to make it go all the way and I think a scandal should happen but not right away it would be to sudden ... but do what you think is best,I am sure whatever you write will be amazing and idea will come to you
Good Luck :D
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