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I might do his P.O.V.... but i might start it as a new story, so 'what lies between my heart' follows her and a new one can follow him....... i'll have to conisder time and stuff and then I might do that.. :)

Hahah well umm maybe you couold change pov or umm make it so that maybe he gets her to fall in love with him and then maybe disses her idk just make sure you dont make it seem like shes the only bitch out of the relationship. AHAHAH. :)
Thanks for reading my story i am probably gonna have another chapter up today. -Brooke

Thanks!! :)
I appreciate it and thanks for reading it! :)
I'd try and make it that he's playing a game to, but since it's her Perspective, it's hard to convay that he's also playing a game, as for the background, due to being new here, I have no idea how to change it!! lolz

:) simz :)

OH MY GOD. What lies beetween my heart is my favorite. You make your words flow together the story was like a movie in my head. The characters were great and Nathan was wonderful. Maybe make it so Nathan plays a little bit of a game. Bc i really dont want to feel like the main character is a bitch when she is just playing games if he is messing with her a little too it would make it alott easier to read bc usually its the other way around with the guy playing a game with the girl. GREATTT STORYY. This is just a little tip to make your background for your story a little less neon so they focus more on the story. like make it a beige or white. SOme kind of neutral tone. JUst a tip dont have to use it :D. But seriously I totally am in love with your story. Couldd you pretty please read my story Just Smile, Please? I justttt added a new chapter. :) If you read i hope you like and i would really like some feedback.

I need feedback on this story, pleaseee. http://stories.mibba.com/read/187728/Where-He-Belongs/

Whether you choose to read it or not, hi! It's nice to meet you, I'm Sammie. :D

xSam

Hi everyone!! :)

Yeh Talia - It's me!! lolz :)

Plz read my story and poem people :)

:) simz :)

hello, welcome to mibba. whats up?

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im emily

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Hey Simz, is that you! Its Talia! Welcome.

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