Kayzi / Comments

It's a girl lol. It's just occurred to me that i've never been very clear on that. But i'm glad you asked so i can make adjustments to the story! Thanks for commenting :) it's very much appreciated. And you find out her name in the second chapter, btw.

No offense taken,
&& thankks[:

Yeahh it's my first language
I really suck at grammar if that's already not a given. -.-
I have the revised versions on my computer still, but yeah, I'm spending the whole day fixing the tenses

Will Do[:

When i have the chance, i'll spend the whole day doing that to your stories, it's the least i can do for a fellow writer. :D

Completely agree but i'm tired of people who just say "Nice story" && comments that get me nowhere. Yeah they're nice && all but i'm looking to make my stories better.

You're so right, I'll surely add that.{:

Thank you so much for the criticism, it really means a lot. She does wash up on shore, so that's why she's in crazy shock. When mermaids [in my story] change out of their tales, yes they do get clothes, I wouldn't want them naked.
I'll do my best to keep it flowing and fix it, within keeping the same story.
Thank you a million.!

Thanks I'll keep that in mind.

Thank you for the comment and advice and yeah I can come up with a better way to say things, but it's just how my character is in this story, now sure, he won't swear all the time because he is supposed to be smart, but I was just trying to express how upset he was, but still thank you.

*looks around* I do like what you've done with the place! :D

I live in a small, country town; so the stars are bright and clear here. It's absolutely amazing.<3 It makes me feel so small - but not in a bad way. Like there's so much more out there to see.(:

Anytime! It was really good.(:
I love the stars as well. I like to lie outside and watch the night sky. It's quite relaxing, and calming.

oh wow, geez, that comment was amazing. Thank you so much, its hard to believe your fourteen. I really appreciate the edit and constructive criticism. Exactly what i need <3

What happened to Imprisoned? :(

Sorry dude :P it's just my side project right now for whenever I get bored.

It's really up to you. But I think you could bring it into the story a different way, rather then chunk it into one paragraph :D

Noo problem! And thanks a bunch for yours. Currently going back and fixing it!!

Wow! I'll definitely check it out!

Oooo that sounds exciting!! What is that?