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At first I thought you were talking about Horizon...Yeah, I was online when it happened. It signed me out then I had to sign in and I was like "Woah, what is all this?"

I haven't been on my profile in FOREVER! I'm always on Mibba for the drafts but almost never for anything else. Yeah, that poem has been up there forever. It's really bad. I wrote it about four years ago for an English assignment. It's so terrible, haha.

Aw, thank you! I'm glad you liked it. It was a short little beginning, but the chapters are much longer, ha ha. :)

Thanks for the story comment!
It's only rated that way because of drug use and few violent scenes- and a few characters have a...very mature styled language. I hope that settles the weariness you feel towards Abscond!

thank you for the comment and all, but it would be a bit better if you wouldn't tear apart my story like that :/ just sayin...

I thought I'd let you know that I'm possibly deleting [b]The Black Dragon[/b]...Since you were my favorite commenter, I'd let you know. :/

Mmm. Jaksom.

With the whole "escorsting Aldonza" thing and Aimery falling happened at the same time. Which is why you only see one side or the other. I realise this is probably a bad way to do it, but it's the way that makes the most sense to me.

If you ever read Robert Jordan's work... it's only 2 years that spans over 14 books. And it can be a bit more confusing, because all the books are dealing with past, present and future events, even though they're happening at the same time. Like. Stuff in book 2, would continue in like, book 6 or something. /That/ confuses me.

I am not discouraged by your words. You could make a really good book critic someday even by the advice you are giving me.

It may seem like you are discouraging me, but trust me, it is actually really helpful and i totally appreciate the criticism. It strives me to get better and better.

All in all, I hope that you just continue to read my stories and i hope you really enjoy them!

Thx!

I read what you had posted and it was very helpful. Thanks for the advice. I'm usually one not to take advice from others, just cuz i'm like that. But anyways, i edited out some of the little 'smudges' in the story. Read it and tell me what you think.

Thx

It helped me out very much! Thank you! :)

Hey, I have a question on what you said. How I was telling and not doing enough showing in describing a person.

What exactly do you mean? I'd like to know for future references.

Thank you! :) I appreciate that right.

You are helping me and I appreciate that! :D

it has been a while, I apologize...:/

Your comments make me feel like a crappy writer and I decent writer at the same time. >.< lol

Thank you so much for the comment!!!!! <3

It's fine. I hope you had a good holiday!

Merry Christmas to you! :)

Reread it and tell me what you think. ^^b It's slightly better, but I could definetly add some stuff to it.

Also, Aldonza knows Aimery's too weak to pose much of a threat, well, that's what she thinks. But she's trusts Lenl (Aidan) to be able to handle him.

That's why she doesn't have "the brute" guarded. Plus she doesn't want too many people to know.

I am revising it, because I knew I was misisng something, but I couldn't figure out what. :) Thank you, for pointing it out to me. Mucho gracias.

Not changing much, but adding detail. Not going to warp the meaning of the chapter, just add the little bits here and there that will, err, fill it out, I suppose it the correct terminology for it.

But anyway. I'll let you know when the revisions are complete and get your take on them. Your help has been invaluable. *bows*

Spoiler's for you, since I can't answer all your questions, because they are there in the later chapters.

But Bonding is like a marriage with out all the hubbub, but Aldonza's magic's a little bit off, meaning she can bond people on accident, but normally it's done on purpose, which is why she has to wear gloves and can't let flesh touch hers.

When Aimery's fingers tangled in her hair, he sat up, so yes, he's sitting up.

Lenl (Aidan) did warn Aimery about the others. He was warning him, wasn't a blank statement.

No, the guards guarding Aldonza are the ones loyal to her father, so they believe she's the traitor.

BIG SPOILER! If you'd read the rest you'd know this! But Aimery loves Aldonza, when they were little they used to fly together. But then her wings were hacked off and the war started, but, she doesn't remember him as more than a fleeting memory.

That's why Aimery wanted to save her.

END OF SPOILERS, I think, lol.

Aimery has black scales. ^^b