Thankyou so much for your comment and helpful suggestions. As a growing writer, I really enjoy hearing what people think of my work and how they think I can grow. I am taking your advice to consideration, and have already thought of a few ways to change things up a bit, but I'm not going to reveal anything just yet. Look forward to some more "color" in the original characters in the next chapter :)
Thank you so much for the comment! Yeah, the chapters are a bit short; I usually keep them to one significant event per chapter except for short things and the like. I think you get what I mean. I also try not to move through things too quickly, and I'm determined to finish this to the very end instead of leaving it to rot underneath everything else I have to do. I have some really good stuff (in my opinion) set up and I don't want to let it go, so I'll also try to update more than how much I have with past stories.