HikariHaruka / Comments

think u could read this? http://stories.mibba.com/read/259275/The-Sorrows-Of-Wet-Land/

Oh really? That sucks.

elo! just blondering and came 2 say hi!

I'm sorry it took so long for me to reply. My computer crashed. >.< Stupid thing. OH well.

How have you been?

Oh well if you fix those things it would make the story that much better and it would be more interesting..just keeping it like that wouldn't be helpful for you if you want people to actually read the story.

It's pretty good. THere are a few things that could be fixed. For example, there should be periods after each sentance, you don't really want to keep putting "with" repeatedly into the senence so instead you put something like
"A girl of four years old with red short straight hair, silver streaks, and beautiful ice blue eyes. She was wearing a black dress currently while running to her father screaming."

Your welcome. that's good to hear. ^.^

nothing really.. i'm moving songs from the CD to the computer and watching MadTV =)

Alright. Of course it can. If you no longer want people to read it you go back into your stories or whatever it is you posted it, check the box next to it and delete it.

that's the spirit! LOL!

You should try it anyways. You never know unless you try

I've been better but I'm trying not to complain.
How are you? ^_^

thanks ^.^ i think i did well =)
how's life with you?

it was really fun!! but now, duty calls >.< i have to study for tomorrow's midterm.. i haven't even opened my book yet since i got it..

Post it or I could always help you with it..if you want. You'll get better as you continue writing.

That sucks. You should. I'd read it.. :D

i is good ^.^ LOL!! celebrating Family Day with some friends right now ^.^

girl it is warm over there.
lol, i will switch homes with you!!!!!

me tooo
it sucks hardcore lol.

how is puerto rico.
I wish i was there!!!!

oh hahahhaah
i see, well i hope writers block subsides soon