hi newb... my name is Shannan "male Aussie wink wink"... and well you asked for feed back so get ready for a lexture lol... heres a little advise for ur book...DETAIL... is one of the many keys for a succsesful book
eg
the figure emerged from the shadows. hooded in a dark jacket back bent forward face hidden showdowed in darkness. his hand emerged from the jacket pocket revealing a black stainlees steel pistol.
hope this helps by the wAY love it if you read my noval Land of Myth
comment aswell hat people who read and dont com its anoyying