Duddeee! That is perfect. The rhyming is spot on. And I love the stanzas. It was good before-but now it's amazing!! :D good job!!! Haha it's an honor to have someone even want to listen to my advice. But I'm glad you did because it's awweessomme. You've got some really awesome skills girll! Aweesomeness.[:
Aww thanks [: I'm glad you like it. It came to me as I was thinking about someone. Haha. Anyway, I read Why and I love the message :D. Maybe it'd be cool if you incorporate some rhyming and stuff into into it. Or create some stanzas? Cuz right now, it's kindof a poem but it's kindof like a journal entry.
Poem kindof are journal entries so you're on the right track. And it's really good though. :D
I guess everyone tries/wants to be perfect but it's impossible. The people I really love are far from perfect.
Ha I wish they'd give you a sign. Well, I don't think you actually know if someone admires you. That's why you don't have to be perfect. There's someone there and you have to find them. But probably trying to be perfect will bring you farther away from that person. Like Mean Girls! Ha, that was probably hard to follow. Anyway, thanks for the amazing comment. :D I really appreciate it.
thanks for the aweomse comment.
check out my toher poems called: Live, Love, And Laugh & What does Love Mean & Catch me & Love Never Fails
check out my stories called: Our Love Can't Seperate & a Pikachu Love Story
heyy luna thanks for the comment but you do realize you left 3 of the same comments. anyway no Leah is not younger than Mac!! It's just tara's dialouge for my character is always to excited she really is calm, cool, and collected. Please read my chapter i hope you like it and please leave more comments.