Unspoken_Lies / Comments

@ Bangarang!
You're welcome! And it's always good to see writers taking advice from other writers to improve where we can. It's what we're here for ^_^

Hey there Thank you so much for your comment on my co-write The Rose and the Slipper. It means so much to us and I am glad that you like it I have edited the layout to make the links easier to read and I will be sure to check over my grammar soon

Hey! If you're interested in entering a contest of mine that I'm hosting it's a drabble writing one :)

http://www.mibba.com/Forums/Topic/185821/Drabble-Contest-Pictures-OR-Quotes/

@ AmorarEsDeVivir
Don't worry I wasn't... and thanks :)

I hope you didn't feel like I was being overly critical. I want to give the kind of feedback that I would like to receive, and personally I would rather hear "I didn't find this engaging because ______" than nothing but positive feedback. Plus leaving concrit improves my own writing, I feel. Anyway, like I said, I hope you didn't feel I was being rude or unfair. Good luck with all your future writing endeavors. =)

I promise I will have more josh for you soon thank you for your comment!

Aww thank you so much!! I'm so glad you liked it

thank you for your comment! I promise I'll update soon just for you!

Aww thank you so much!! I'm so glad you like it

You're very welcome. c:

Hello c:

i can't wait!! keep it up!

that's a phenomenal way to write, and you happen to do it so elegantly. I really like it.

can i just ask why that is the way you wanted to take the incident? (don't get me wrong, i love it). but it's like, i don't know how i would react in that case. i'd probably be so freaked out or something...

I'm super glad that you enjoyed Glitter in the Snow. If you truly want to read something else of mine, I feel like you would enjoy another piece I've been working on, Fifty Words for Embarrassment. No pressure, of course. In any case, thank you for reading.

-Cait

Thanks for you comment on "How to Be a Heartbreaker" - and especially about my italics tag not being closed. I hate (abhor, detest, etc) Mibba's BB coding. Glad you enjoyed the story!

Thanks for not taking my comment too personally. I know guys like that in real life; and they're not flattering, nor the type of people I want to read about. They really just objectify women. That's my problem with Zach. Now that I'm less angry I'll try to clarify what I meant with that comment. There's a fine line between being a teenage guy and being a straight up a-hole. Normal teenage guys get jealous, but not over petty things like I saw Zach doing.

Also Zac says how much he loves Jasmine's personality but all we ever see in the story is him focusing on her body... And it just turns her into an obsession rather than an actual love interest, or someone he genuinely cares about. So we're told one thing but shown something completely different. Honestly (I did continue reading, up until the prom) we never really get to see much of Jasmine's personality, so to your reader she just becomes another pretty face he's pining after. Love is more than just physical, and all we get from Zac is just that, physically related reasons he's into Jasmine. It'd be great to get to actually see the personality he says he's drawn to, like flashbacks or something. She's fairly absent most of the story unless they're arguing or he's staring at her butt (The line about "bending over in front of her locker, taunting me, tempting me to smack that..." was very very derogatory and just flat out awful and just made him look like scum to be frank, he's her friend, he's supposed to think more of her than that. She's not just some piece of meat who's using her feminine qualities to make him wet himself like he seems to think) or comforting her in an attempt to get back on her good side (comforting to be a good friend is one thing, comforting in an attempt to make her less angry at him is just low). It'd just be great to see her portrayed as more than a trophy and him as more than just some horn dog boy who's got a friend-zone complex. It's just... show and tell from what I read were two different things; I wish we could actually see the things he originally talks about in reference to her.

Sorry, I just wanted to give you some actual thought out reasons why I took issue with his character, I felt like before it was just a very heated rant, and honestly you deserved an explanation. I'm sorry!

Thank you for the comment on Runaway Train. :) I didn't even realize that about the POVs, but yes. It is John, Kenneth, John, Kenneth. I thought I put that in there... guess not. I'll go fix it.

Hi, thanks for commenting on Cherry Bomb.I'm really glad you're enjoying it!The actor I used for Lukas on the character page is Aaron Johnson. He's the main guy in Kick Ass and Nowhere Boy. He's a cutie!

I'm definitely gonna keep reading, hon. You're really good. -A