melissa12lovu / Comments

Love the Teenage Dreams story. Please keep writing.

Hey giirly! We Own The Night, was updated<3

Hey girrl! 'We Own The Night' was just updated! So if you could go and comment and tell me what you think, that's be amazing! Thank you<3

Hey Melissa! I've got a new Nick story I had recently posted. And it's only the summary, so if you could please read, check it out and comment on it for me, that would mean a lot for me. So thank you very much and here's the link;;
http://stories.mibba.com/read/409021/We-Own-The-Night/

No problem :) Oh, sounds really great!

Hi :)
I just wanna say that I [b]love[/b] your stories :D
- and you really makes me love Nick Jonas.
The only of your stories I haven't read yet is [i]"Our Life, Nick Jonas and I"[/i], and that's the story I'll begin on now :D
And then you actually giving me a lot of ispiration to my new story, which I plan to update on Mibba very soon :)
So I just want to say thanks for your [b]great[/b] stories and for giving me inspiration :D

// Sara - Kuki

hi sweety
how are you

Can't wait fo rmore are you gonna make a sequal

Thanks for the friend request! I'm Holly. =)
What's up?

Hey, Melissa! I really like your story. Needs a little work, but other than that, it's very good. & Fun to read! Hope you add more, or start writing more! & If you could do me a favor, I just posted a new story, that I co-wrote, "My. Beautiful Rescue," Means the world. Comment and tell me whatyca thing! Comment me back soon!(: Oxoxoxo~Morgie.

Hey, just be looking at the first chapter I think you need to improve the structure of it. You need more clear cut paragraphs, rather than starting on a new line each time. Also, you need quotation marks to differentiate dialogue from passage because it's quite confusing otherwise. Perhaps try to make your sentences longer...just because they kind of read like bullet points at the moment. It's mainly the structure that needs to improve otherwise you're good :)

hey, just saying that i really like your story, but its kinda hard to read because there aren't any quotation marks. it would really make it easy if u would add some. thanks
ps my names melissa too so keep up hte good work

hey, is there anyway I could get you to read and comment my new story, i dont know whether to continue it or not?
The Long Road Back
-Kaiti