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One more thing: Whenever someone new talks, you are supposed to start a new paragraph. (:

If you never need any help, feel free to ask! (:

Uh, Let me think. If I remember correctly, a main thing was dialogue.

For example, you were doing stuff like
Zach-
Cameron-


It should be:
"I like pie," said Zach.
"No way! Me too!" agreed Cameron.

Then there were times when you forgot capital letters. All names, places, and beginning of sentences should be capitalized. Proper nouns all have to be capitalized.

And then, there were a few times where you had run on sentences. That's basically when you had a giant sentence, that kept going on, and on. You just kept using more and more commas. They can easily be turned into new sentences.

Hope that helps! :)

I'd love to help you out! Just let me know when, and I'll be more than happy! (: Any questions, and you can come to me. I'm kind of a grammar freak.

thank you so much!!(: be sure to comment if you like it. & i'd love to check out your stories! i'll do that right now. :D

hi!(: i was wondering if you could check out my allstar weekend fanfic? i would really appreciate it. thank you so much! http://stories.mibba.com/read/352572/Thanks-For-The-Memories/

Hey! Do you think you could read my new Allstar Weekend fan fic? It's a collab with me and one of my friends. http://stories.mibba.com/read/360448/Lets-Forget-How-Fragile-We-Are/ I would really appreciate it if you gave us feedback! Thanks!

Hiii thaanks! I'm Maureen.

haha yeah idkk why it did that, maybe cause i didnt update it for a long time but dont worry im still writing (:

uhhh, i have no idea why!! im still writing and updating!! (:

thanks for your story comments (:

Yeah but you don't remember anything! xD

You lived there your whole life?

The states aren't that awesome. >.<

Really? Why?

I live in Florida so I don't get to go much into Mexico. I know it close though.

oh thanks lol

june!!!!

I'm Mexican so it's pretty embarrassing to say barely speak any spanish. >< I know, I'm laying down. =]

oh thats stupid
people have different movies types and other people should know that