i read your story. you should watch out for grammar and punctuation errors. i only have math hw to do so i was thinking of doing that later and starting on the layout and banner. if you want, after i'm done with that, i can edit your story and fix the errors on it.
i just read your story, here's a quick tip. when you want a reader to see the link to the mansion or any picture this is what you have to do:
open it with a bracket, type in url, then comes the equal sign, copy and past the address of the picture after the equal sign, close it with the bracket, put the name of whatever the picture is, open another bracket, and the type in /url, and finally close the bracket. here's an example:
[url=the website address goes here]name of whatever the picture is[/url]
i could make one for you but the thing is in order for me to make you a story layout, i need to make it from your account, meaning i would need you password because that's how all story layouts are. when i came on here, i had to ask a friend over mibba to do it for me because i didn't know how to do one. so i gave her my password. but if you don't want to it's okay.
i'll also make you a banner. i need to read your story first so i can get an idea of how i need to make the banner and layout. you would have to give me a few days to do it because right now, i have to try an update one of my stories. i could do it and start if for you tomorrow but i will probably get it done by friday or saturday.
i remember when i joined mibba. i had to get used to it too. but before this i had a quizilla account until i found out about mibba i left quizilla and came on here. mibba is waaaaaaay better because you can make story layouts, banner, and do a bunch of other stuff too. what i love about this website is that we can also meet new people.
i have to be in the mood too when i write my stories, or else i just won't update. if you need any help with creating a story layout or if you need a banner for your story, i can make you one. if you wanna see the banners i make you can look at my stories.