I do like his songs where he tends to goof off and I can stand his cursing, but there is just a limit that makes me think 'Really? Does it need to be that dirty?'
Fack is actually one of my least favorite songs.
I mean, granted most of his songs are dirty, but Fack is just a little over-reaching. It's not exactly a song I can play with my family or friends listening in...
Wow, 5 days iss a long time. I'll try to update tomorrow, but I'm not going to gaureentee anything because I honestly don't know if I'll be able too. Hopefully you'll get to read another update, but I'm not making any promises. Kay?
Okay, so grammar - maybe not such a big deal, just a few commas in the wrong places, no biggie.
Descriptions.. well... It's hard to explain. When I read stories, I can easily picture what is being written. But when I read yours, (take no offense!) there are black patches... does that make sense? o.O?? Anyway, this is what I think, so it prolly doesn't count for much, but when you write, try to expand sentences, add a bit of detail. I try to include as many 'senses' as possible; sight, sound, touch, smell and taste.
For example, instead of 'I walked into the dark, empty room, I saw Kurt sitting in the corner.' Expand it to something like, 'I stepped cautiously into the gloomy darkness of the old room. The thick, dust filled air clogged up my lungs. A muffled choking noise sounded from deeper within the seemingly empty room. Shuffling forwards, I barely recognized the huddled figure in the corner.... bla bla blaaa... soemthing about his hair shining in from the light let in through the door.... yada yada xP
Does that clear up anything? And sorry if I seem a bit... I dunno... pushy? bitchy? Weird? o.O?? .... I'm fine with the last xP
But ya. Hope I helped =D
OH!!! Also, sorry (again) for the ramble xD I'm in a little bit of a rush, and I tend to ramble when rushed....
I'm planning three total. Ulric's and two others. While that's the plan that's not for sure. It could be more... could be less. Though I'm pretty sure I'm going to do at least one more.
Lol, it's not over yet XD. I was just saying that I normally put their first 'big momment' in the last chapter. I still have a few more chapters left... and I'm thinking about making this a series, so even when it's over, it's really not. And you love my cliff hangers... it keeps you and the other readers coming back XD
Yeah, their superstitions and fears definitely work. I'm hoping to have an update Saturday, if not then Monday at the latest. I'm excited that you like the story so much!
Thanks! I got tired of searching for werewolf stories and only getting Twighlight... it was bugging me. As for the year... sometime in the past. Before cars and paved/cooblestone roads. I don't have a set date in mind, but way before America was found and... well... pretty much when it took days to get to the next village on horseback, when all they had was superstitions and traditions. Does that help?
Ahaha, that's kind of dumb. (Just my personal opinion)
But you're 13, maybe you'll grow out of it.(:
My mom hoped I would, but I got my nose pierced when I was a week from 15 and it was all down hill from there. xD