Thank you very much for the comment. :) I'm glad you picked it a part like that :)
Where you've picked up on places with missing words - I think I may have actually just forgotten to write [i]seduction[/i] and [i]intoxicated[/i]. :) I actually went through it a few days ago and re-typed a few things and possibly just forgot to change tenses and such with some words ;)
This is just a question - do you think that [i]maybe[/i] the swagger turning into something trashy kind of works just a teeny little bit? Like I'm thinking about it right now, and I keep thinking that maybe it gets a little trashier and desperate as she feels Lamia coming back...I'm just asking in that regards just in case it still doesn't quite feel right to you :)
And I shall re-read that story comment again in a few hours and re-edit the comma's and hyphens (the latter I'm becoming way too fond of over commas) and yeah :) (You've got me in a critical kinda mood for the English Lit essay I need to re-draft) :)
Anywho thank you very much for the comment. I'm very glad it was critical, and that there were some good things in there too. And that you think I wrote Salvatore alright. :)
Hello everyone. :) Sorry I'm a bit behind on this, and I should've done this on Monday, but entries for my contest are due [b]this Saturday.[/b] If you need an extension (and I totally understand if you do) feel free to ask.