I loved the "I'm Amy who are you?" "Chimali, little one now don't ever do that again" part. I had the voices and image in my head! It was really cool/cute. =) Btw the last part was added in like a pro. I thought it was a nice touch and reminded me of previous outstanding stories and movies that I have been exposed to. Your story is like a movie on it's own with all the details you add in. I love it! =)
I think you did an excellent job with that. I wish the chapter was as long as some of the others. I dont know why your saying it's near the end, You could spin off in so many directions that's actualy what I was hoping for. Job well done on this chapter!
From Wattpad, I love your story and now I realized that while I was on chapter 27 on wattpad I could have been on 36 on here, I forgot about this site...but anyway....great work please upload soon!
I just got 5 co workers to start reading Thicker Than Blood and they love it. I work in a corperate office so I'm hoping to get more involved. Keep up the Great work I think your an Amazing Writer!
I'm dying for an update. I reed Thicker than Blood at work to pass the time. I'm dying fo an update the suspence is killing me! Thanks look foward to hearing from you soon!
I think I actually like this story more than chocolate :). Is nice that it has that more "grown up", book style read to it, you can really imagine it being published. It's amazing and I really envy your ability to write so well, in what seems such an effortless manner :). GezsGrim x
Lol, don't worry about leaving me a comment about my comment on your story (wow, talk about confusing haha). Half the time I don't even expect it, because all the other stories I'm subscribed to, readers don't get back with their writers.
I just thought of something, regarding Nathaniel's children. I don't know if you already did this, and you might of, but go a little more in depth with the death of his children, and the feelings that he went through at the time. I have no idea if you planned to do that, but it was just a thought I had while I was reading the comment you left me. And it could show his weaker side too, but it was just a thought I had. :)
Regarding the sex scenes, don't worry about them. I've read worse, believe me haha. I still stand by what I said in my last comment regarding it. :)